This is a poem that I wrote. Please give me some feedback.
The message
I wish I could send
But with no one to send to
The corners
I wish I could turn
Though the path is straight
The things
I wish
I could remember
In a mind
With nothing to offer
Zane's Blog
"It's not whether you get knocked down, it's whether you get up"-Vince Lombardi
dear Zane,
I think that your poem is very good. I certainly can’t do better than that myself. If I could do that good I would make TONS of poems like that. I might ever try to sell them some how. I would maybe even enter a contest for poems. You would probably have a good chance at winning.
P.S. Can you tell me your secret to making them? Also how hard is it for you to make them?
sincerely, Cole
Zane,
think that your poem created a nice reading experience for me and probably many others. I liked how you said what you could wish you could do and why you can’t. Also you made the last line of every stanza very strong.
Antara