Personal Narrative and Reflection

One writing technique that I used was dialogue. One example of this is when my mom and dad were having a conservation on the phone after the crash. My dad and mom were talking about the crash.

Another example of when I used dialogue is when the crash happened. In the car my dad checked if I was okay. Also the workers in the salon asked me questions and I answered them. This shows that I used a lot of dialogue.

I want to improve the part where the crash happens. I want to improve it because it is not that descriptive.  I think that if I worked on that part the reader would feel and understand how I felt and how scary it was.

When I look back at my writing “The Crash” I am proud of the dialogue I used.

One example of that is in the first paragraph I used a lot of dialogue there. I am proud of the dialogue I used because in the past years I wasn’t that good at putting dialogue in my writing.

If you haven’t read my story recommend that you read it.

Narrative Reflection

One writing technique I used was dialogue. One example of this is when my mom and dad are having conversation on a phone. Another example of this is when me and my dad went to the car repair shop and they talked.

Another writing technique I used was internal thinking. I used that when I was thinking that the crash was a dream. Another example is when I couldn’t believe  that I had a crash.

I want to improve the part where the crash happens. I think that if I work on that part where the crash happens. I want to improve that part because it is not descriptive. If I make it more descriptive the reader will understand how it felt to be in a crash and how scary it was.

When I look at my writing “The Crash” I am proud of the dialogue I used. One example of that is in the first paragraph I used a lot of dialogue there. I am proud of the dialogue I used because in the past years I wasn’t good at putting dialogue in my stories.

My Narrative

“Is there anything else we have to pack up?!” mom asked us.

“I don’t think so!” my dad answered.

“Did you return your violin?” Mom reminded me.

“Oh yeah” I said. I had forgotten to return my violin because of all the excitement. We  were going to Turkey to see our family. I had been waiting for a year for this day to come. I was overloaded with excitement. My dad said that we had to return the violin because it was a rental. My dad went outside and waited for me to get my violin case. I flew upstairs and got my violin from my closet, and headed downstairs. I sat in my seat and buckled my seat belt. My dad typed in the GPS where we were going.Then we went. After a while we stopped at the red light. We were almost there. I could see the store.The green light was on, my dad started to move. Then a black car appeared at the side. “CRASH!” Everywhere went white out of the steering wheel there came an airbag. The car was making a honking sound that was so loud I couldn’t hear myself. While everything was happening I was in shock. My heart stopped for a second. Then I broke down in tears. “Ahhhhh!!!” I shouted. My dad quickly turned his head. 

 “Are you hurt!” he said in a scared voice.

“No!” I said in tears. Everyone in the street looked up. We got out of the car. My head was dizzy and my legs were trembling while I cried. The workers in the salon came outside to see what had happened. When they saw that there was a crash and that I was crying, they came and took me inside to calm down.They gave me water. When I calmed down they asked me questions.”How old are you?” one worker asked 

“Ten” I answered and looked outside. I was so grateful that nobody got hurt. I looked at the car to see how it was damaged. The door was bent and scratched. The police and ambulance came. My dad signaled for me to come. I got up from the couch and headed to the door. The  paramedics  checked me to see if I was hurt. Then he checked my dad and asked, 

“Does anywhere hurt?” 

 My dad told him that his leg felt like it hurt.The police were also there. He was asking questions to the man that crashed into us. I eavesdropped on their conservation. “What did the traffic light say?” he asked. I leaned closer to her to see what he was saying. 

“Well, I went on the yellow light,” he admitted. Ohh so that’s what happened I thought WHY couldn’t he wait for the green light. Then a truck came up and pulled both of the cars. The police said to follow it. A car came while I was crossing the road. I squeezed my dad’s hand. When we arrived at the shop, the owner asked “ What can I help you with?” his voice echoed in the place. When we told him that our car was here he guided us to the man behind the desk. He was talking on the phone. We sat on the chairs waiting for the man to be done. After he was done my dad got up and talked about what we had to do. While they were talking I couldn’t get over what just happened. I was in shock. There were butterflies in my stomach and they wouldn’t stop flying. After my dad was done talking the man gave him his card. “Thank you so much” my dad said he was so grateful

“My pleasure,” he said with a smile. We walked out of the shop. My dad called a taxi. I looked where we had crashed and the shop we were going to was right there! We waited there for a while. A black car came and we assumed that it was ours.We got in and the first thing I did was buckle up my seat belt. My dad got his phone out and called my mom. When she answered my dad said “ We had a crash” There was no sound for a second. Then my mom said “Did anyone get hurt” I could hear the concern in her voice. “ Thankfully, nobody got hurt,” he answered. When we arrived home, my siblings were waiting for me at the door. When I arrived they all asked questions.”How did it happen?” 

“What happened?”  ” How did it happen” But there was no time to answer their questions so we had to go to the airport. We carried out the luggage. Then a car came and we moved the luggage to the trunk. And went in I leaned out the window and thought of everything that happened. And realized how much I’d been through in one day. I closed my eyes and went to sleep. 

 

 

 

 

Land of Stories 4 by Chris Colfer

Hi! I finished the Land of Stories book 3 and now I am on the 4th one. Conner and Alex are twins and the main characters in this book. I think that Alex is very determined and brave.

One example of Alex being brave is when she tries to find out who the masked man is. Alex, Goldilocks, Jack, Red Riding Hood, and Conner all go into books to try to stop him. Alex does not hesitate a bit. She is very confident. Even though her brother and Peter pan  are captured by the Masked Man she does not give up, In fact it motivates her to work harder and stop the Masked Man.

Another example is when she was kicked out of the fairy council by the fairies because Alex had gotten mad at them and she used her powers on his brother and the fairies. So the fairies kicked her out of the fairy council because all she thought about was capturing the Mask Man. Even then she did not quit.

This shows that she is very brave and determined.

Land of Stories by Chris Colfer

The book I am reading right now is Land of Stories book 3 by Chris Colfer.   I love the Land of Stories series because it is full of mystery and it is also fantasy. There are two main characters in the book, Alex and Conner.

In the book “Land of Stories” the author  describes a lot about the two characters and their history. The twins live in different worlds. Alex lives in the fairy tale world and Conner lives in the normal world. Their father died in a car accident. Conner was in the airplane returning from Germany. Conner went in the bathroom on the airplane and was talking to Mother Goose from the magic mirror. And he got caught talking with mother goose by Bree. And he had to explain everything to her.

Conner and Bree try to find a way to go the fairy tale world because the fairy tale world is invaded by the french army.  And then when they come to the fairy tale world they try to stop the french army with Alex.

Welcome to 5th Grade!

Hi, Welcome to my blog! I am very excited to write on my blog again especially because last year we couldn’t go on our blog due to Covid pandemic. Last year was really mixed up we had to wear masks, stay six feet apart and we had plexi glass around our desks.

I did not like the masks last year they were not comfortable and it was hard to breath. I also didn’t like recces. We could not play with another class. We had to stay in one area like the field,playground, and blacktop. But the good thing is that it is not like that this year.

One thing I remember well in the last 18 months was the websites we used, and I really liked the site Reflax math. I enjoyed Relflax because it made math learning fun. It thought multiplication, division, addition, and subtraction. You learn and have fun at the same time.

Now I am in 5th grade I have the best teacher, teacher aid, and classmates. I really look forward to graduating and going to middle school. I also look forward to learning challenging and new stuff this year.