Question 1: What writing techniques/strategies did you use most effectively in this piece? Provide at least two examples from your narrative.
I feel like I used a lot of detail, and a strategy for that was I used good dialogue with actions and I also described things very detailed. An example for this is in the text I described what the mountains looked like by saying, “It looked as if the farthest mountains were dipped in forest green paint and smudged to make a tree-looking texture.”
An example of dialogue was when I said, “I am not!” I think that it would have been different if I just put, “I am not!” But since I put, “I am not!” It made the tone sound different. Then I put actions at the end of when I said something, to make the reader able to imagine the scene. For example, it says in the texts: ““I…Don’t want to go first either.” I shook my head, grabbing onto the wood railings of the platform.” After a character states something, I put their action afterward so you can imagine what’s happening while reading.
Question 2: What are some areas in your writing that you still want to improve?
To be honest I would like the improve the ending when I go on the zipline because it just doesn’t sound right to me. I like it, and It’s not that it is bad, or wrong, it just feels too descriptive and long but it is a good ending. I don’t know, sometimes I just get the feeling it is just, ‘too much.’
I like my story a lot in general, but I feel sometimes it’s just too much. I also have another ending that I really like but I decided to choose a different one, but it’s hard to choose which one I like better so I stuck with this one.
Question 3: What is something you are most proud of in this piece?
I am most proud of how I remembered and wrote the story so well it ended up feeling like yesterday after I wrote it!
It took a while to get the final piece, and it also took a lot of remembering to do because the story was a bit ago, though I did remember a lot. Mainly I like my story so much because it was very realistic and detailed. And for the process of getting it so descriptive, I had to remember a lot of the details to make the story as great as I can get it.