I learned that you have to persuade your audience really well to make it work. A persuasive essay is when you tell someone to make a change. To make it work you have to use strong words. I also learned not to use words like maybe, it could happen,it could work.Sometimes you can even talk back to the audience. Sometimes you can do a mini story.

I think that if I put my essay on the camera I would look at the camera so I think I would have persuaded more people. I feel pretty good a lot of people could see it because I’m pretty sure I will persuade them. I also would have persuade more people if I pointed my finger to them saying you.  

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