I think that some writing techniques I used in well this narrative were dialogue and expanding on detail. I added a lot of conversational dialogue like when my aunt and the instructor were discussing whether we were going or not. I used a lot of internal dialogue when I counted down for my death at the end.
In this story, I really expanded on details, especially when I described the day and where we were at the beginning of the story. I also really expanded on detail when I explained my body language when my uncle was talking.
Some areas in my writing I think I want to improve more is describing people. In this story, I noticed that I barely provided a description for people like my cousins, my uncle, my aunt, and the instructor. Looking forward to the next story I’m writing I will keep in mind to take some time describing the characters.
Something that I am really proud of that I did in this writing piece is use new writing elements that I’ve learned such as sensory language and matching action with dialogue. In Sky High when I was on the zipline I used lots of sensory language as shown in this line when I wrote: “I could hear the choppy wind echoing within my ears”. One example of when I made my actions match my word is when I wrote “Open the door already”, I whined impatiently while tugging on the door handle.”
In conclusion, I am very proud of what I wrote and happy that I am learning from my mistakes and have room to improve.